2025/11/22 Day1409 【英作 for 推し#41】
Nerissaの誕生日配信内の英語を使う。Happy Birthday, Nerissa!
最初のアニメーションは面白いし、歌は鳥肌ものだしテンション上がるし(BloodRavenで歌ってくれるとは思ってなかったから余計にうれしい)、ゲームは可愛いし楽しいしで、最高でした。
配信↓
Channel: Nerissa Ravencroft Ch. hololive-EN
The stream title: 【3D BIRTHDAY LIVE】Let’s party and sing with good friends!
配信の19:25～のBibooのターンでBibooが使ってた表現と、22:39～のShioriのターンでShioriが使ってた表現を使ってみよう。
ボイチェンを使ってもFUWAMOCOのアクセントがめっちゃ特徴的ですぐに分かるのおもしろいし可愛い。
- My original sentence
- Feedback from ChatGPT
- Summary
- Edited Version (Minimal Edit, Keeping Your Vocabulary)
- その他コメント
My original sentence
Their rizz were so enthralling!
If someone said those type of words, I might be like “I don’t wanna miss out on such a beeping great experience.”
But it’s not so nice to pull out one million dollars in cash, wave it under your nose.
It’s just showing off, teasing someone.
It’s kinda funny when you do it as a joking, though.
Feedback from ChatGPT
Your writing is very close to natural casual spoken English, especially for a VTuber-style monologue.
The tone feels playful, chatty, and expressive — which fits the vibe you’re aiming for.
There are just a few tiny adjustments to make it flow more like something said aloud rather than written, but overall it works.
Overall Tone Assessment
✔️ Casual enough for a stream
✔️ Vocabulary fits a modern internet vibe
✔️ Humor, exaggeration, and reaction style are natural
✔️ The structure feels like someone reacting to something funny on stream
Only small tweaks would make it sound more fluid and spoken — but it is not wrong.
I’d rate the naturalness as:
👉 8.5 / 10 (Very good VTuber-style English)
Line-by-Line Breakdown
“Their rizz were so enthralling!”
❌ Minor grammar issue: rizz is singular, so it should be:
→ “Their rizz was so enthralling!”
Tone:
✔️ Sounds like modern internet slang.
✔️ “Enthralling” is a little formal, but paired with slang makes it funny — which works.
rizzが新しい言葉でスラングよりなのは知ってたけど、enthrallingは逆にフォーマル寄りだったんだね。Nerissaが使ってたから真似してみたけど、知らなかった。
“If someone said those type of words, I might be like ‘I don’t wanna miss out on such a beeping great experience.’”
✔️ Very natural spoken tone.
✔️ “beeping great experience” sounds like joking censorship — fits perfectly.
Tiny improvement (not required but smoother):
→ “If someone said that kind of stuff, I’d be like, ‘I don’t wanna miss out on such a beeping great experience.’”
But your version is still acceptable.
“But it’s not so nice to pull out one million dollars in cash, wave it under your nose.”
✔️ Good meaning and tone.
✔️ Sounds like commentary during streaming.
A slightly smoother version could be:
→ “But like, pulling out a million dollars in cash and waving it under someone’s nose isn’t exactly nice.”
But again — yours is fine.
そのままでもいいみたいなのでそのままいく
“It’s just showing off, teasing someone.”
✔️ Natural, short, and conversational.
✔️ Good rhythm after the previous sentence.
No change needed.
“It’s kinda funny when you do it as a joking, though.”
Almost natural — just needs one small fix:
❌ “as a joking” is unnatural.
Correct options:
- “…when you do it as a joke, though.”
- “…when you’re joking, though.”
Either fits the tone.
as a jokingは変か。直そう。
Summary
You used:
- rizz
- enthralling
- miss out on
- beeping
- pull out + cash
- wave it under your nose
All correctly and in a context where they make sense and feel playful.
You succeeded.
This absolutely sounds like something a playful English-speaking VTuber would say.
Edited Version (Minimal Edit, Keeping Your Vocabulary)
Here’s your text with only grammar and flow adjustments:
Their rizz was so enthralling!
If someone said those type of words, I might be like, “I don’t wanna miss out on such a beeping great experience.”
But it’s not so nice to pull out one million dollars in cash and wave it under your nose.
It’s just showing off — teasing someone.
It’s kinda funny when you do it as a joke, though.
その他コメント
Nerissaの誕生日配信と同じ日にVictoria Romanのデビュー配信があった。
Channel: Victoria Roman ヴィクトリア・ロマン
The stream title: 【DENSETSU.EXE DEBUT】 A Shadowy Awakening! 👁️🌂 【Victoria Roman】
Ironmouseの独立後初のコンサート、CLUB IRONMOUSEのプレショーでパフォーマンスして知った方なんだけど、歌がとても素敵だったからデビューしてくれて嬉しい。
配信内での日本語が予想以上に流暢でびっくりした。日本に住んでるんだね。
MINTとPhoebeとDensetsu·EXEっていうアイドルユニットをやるみたいだから、楽しみ。
Neirssaの誕生日ライブあって、Victoriaのデビューもあって、楽しいイベントが多い日だった。
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